Final Draft of Essay 2:
Final Draft of Essay 3:
The reason that each final draft is listed here is because the final draft of essay 2 became the rough draft for essay 3.
Framing Statement:
Revising my essay from the first to final draft clearly shows my growth as a writer and how I met several important learning outcomes. One of the biggest things I learned is that writing is a recursive process, not something you do all at once and then move on from. Learning outcome number 1 taught me this. My first draft was more of a rough outline of my ideas, but as I revised, I focused on improving the organization, clarity, and content. I moved paragraphs around, rewrote my thesis to make it stronger, and made sure each section flowed into one another. Later in the process, I worked on smaller revisions like fixing grammar, punctuation, and even taking some details out and adding others. By taking the time to go through multiple drafts, I was able to create a more thoughtful and finalized piece that makes sense. Another big improvement was on how I used my sources. At first, I relied too much on direct quotes without really explaining them. Then, after going over leaning outcome 2 I practiced paraphrasing and summarizing more, which helped me better connect the sources to my own ideas. I also made sure to analyze the material instead of just listing to what other people said. This made my argument stronger and showed that I could engage with outside ideas while still keeping my own voice in the writing. After looking into learning outcome 4 giving and receiving feedback also helped me a lot. Reading my peers work gave me a better idea of what works and what doesn’t, and I used that knowledge to improve my own writing. I also learned to focus on the bigger changes first, like structure and clarity, and save the small part for last, like fixing grammar and spelling. This approach helped me make the most of the revision process. I also got better at using MLA format correctly after analyzing learning outcome 5. In earlier drafts, my citations and works cited page were a little messy, but I took the time to review the guidelines and fix any mistakes. By the final draft, my citations were clean and consistent, which not only met the requirements but also showed that I understand the importance of giving the correct credit to sources. Finally, I used learning outcome 6 and improved my grammar and sentence level writing. I caught and fixed run on sentences, things that were worded weird, and small punctuation errors that could have distracted the reader and caused me to lose points. These changes made my writing more professional and easier to follow.
Each essay has highlighted sections, parts highlighted in pink are examples of learning outcome 2, parts highlighted in blue are learning outcome 4, parts highlighted in red are learning outcome 5, and parts highlighted in yellow are learning outcome 6.
For learning outcome 4 if you are looking at the essays side by side, you can see where things have been changed, added, and removed.
